25 points! Brainliest to the first honest opinion! I'm writing a novel and I need to get someones honest opinion on if it's a good start.


Let me tell you a story, starting from the beginning.


"No no no no no no no!" Winter raced through he woods trying to find a safe place to hide.


There was no place to hide. She was alone.


She couldn't turn back, because behind her was a killer. A killer who had slaughtered her entire family, and is now after her. She is scared, hurt and desperately trying to get away. Not only had the killer murdered her family, the killer was a demon, a demon who was once her lover.


He promised her love, love beyond anything that her world can offer. But as time passed, she realized how much of a monster he was. His true sadistic nature revealed itself, and she broke up with him. He would not take that. He loved her, and he was insane, so he promised her he would be back, and he would destroy everyone she ever loved. He was going to give her a fate worse than death, by sending her somewhere she could never escape, somewhere that is completely inhuman. He was sending her to a practical hell, and she had no idea as to where or what it was.


So there I was, running for my life from the man who trapped me and promised me eternal suffering. I know i'm not going to escape but I have to try. I just have to. There's no way I can face what he has in mind, not after all he's done to me in the past. I can only imagine the horrors he had in store for me in this hell he plans to send me to.


I stop and hide in a hollowed out tree. I know i'm probably not safe there, but I just sit there and wait. I'm only human, so you can't blame me for wanting to feel safe in an enclosed space, and I can only run for so long.


"Winter~ Come on out my snowflake, I'm not going to hurt you, I just want to see you" I could hear his voice echoing, his voice alone sent shivers through me. He sounds like a psychopath, let me rephrase that, he is a psycho.


"WINTER! I know you're hiding, i can't hear your footsteps anymore." He was close "Come. out. now." My hear rate increased ten times over as I heard him come closer and closer. Then i saw him, he was right in front of me, i didn't know if he could see me, but i assumed he did considering how he yanked me out by my arm.


He held my arms tight and just smiled at me. I stared in his eyes, mine full of fear. I couldn't move, there was nothing I could do. so he dragged me back to my house, the same house that he turned to a slaughterhouse for my family.