Thill/Bovee, Excellence in Business
Communication: Chapter 9, Document Makeover 1
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Downsizing the Main Street office by half
August 27, 2016 By Harold Penel Leave a Comment
I write to you with surprising news to share about the Main Street office!
As many of you know, the Acme steel plant closed its doors four months ago. The reasons behind our decisions after this event are complicated and perhaps even boring so I will just cut to the bottom line. The plant closure caused a devastating loss of business and we have no choice but to drastically downsize the Main Street office by half and subsequently deal with those displaced employees. This should not impact the day-to-day functionality of any other office. A relocation schedule will be distributed to all employees by email no later than Wednesday.
We really apologize for the inconvenience, but it was actually the steel plant’s fault for closing, not ours.
As always, I am happy to answer any questions you may have.
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